I can see the sky becoming blood red,
And the sea became black.
Everything I look seem to be sad,
The lonely tree and the crying bird on it.
I can see that feeling comes again.
Spreading through my hands, legs,
Laughing at me, as if it will rule me forever.
I can feel that I'm getting weak,
As it holds me stronger and stronger.
It reminds me a place once I was,
which gave me a lot of pain.
I can see them waiting for me
of course my blood, But they value my sadness more.
But when I think about the reasons,
Is that the reasons what matters?
Or is that my foolishness to let someone know those.
nice post... i really liked the way u began it.. i mean d first stanza :) .....and yeah rather than disclosing d reasons, its sometimes better to hide
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nice one..i did like the title..i want a happie happie post frm u yaar!!! looong tym!:)
ReplyDelete@ Nesi
ReplyDeleteThank you :P :)
@ Divsi
:) :) :) :) Only for you :)
da..nice..bt change d title..k.:)
ReplyDeleteda..pinne update a happie happie post fast ..:P
ReplyDelete@ Achu
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hmmm...dis is really gud..
ReplyDeleteoh i din knw u had so much pain inside u... ;)
nw i wont tease u dear..
keep postin, itz nt often dat one gets to read dis kinda work..
Cherrzzz!!! :)
@ Niska
ReplyDeleteThank you. And I'm not sad.
very nice...your words live upto ur feelings...nicely potrayed
ReplyDeleteVery well put together. The voice contained in it is unique and not monotonous. Open form is hard for many to learn but great job.
ReplyDelete@ Angel
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
@ Jessi
Thank you. Welcome to my blog. Visit often :) Have fun :)
I want a happy post soon too :)
ReplyDelete@ Dhanya
ReplyDeleteI'll try dear :) Thank you. :)
Good one... specially loved the last lines, those r thoughts that were confusing me at one point of time...
ReplyDelete@ Angel
ReplyDeleteThank you :) :)
"I can see that feeling comes again.
ReplyDeleteSpreading through my hands, legs,
Laughing at me, as if it will rule me forever.
I can feel that I'm getting weak,
As it holds me stronger and stronger."
...I believ you wrote this one poem after a Mastr...tion Session!
:)
@ Nibul
ReplyDeleteHuhh How u got it!! :P
Oh.. nice writing dude...
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emotional...like reading out someones worst feelings!gud1
ReplyDelete@ Zadiya
ReplyDeleteSo you saw my comment on nesi's blog. hehe. Thank you for visiting.